You gave me great vibes, once,
Young lady of the moon.
Every night when you were out
I gazed at the starry sky,
And there you were, just hanging
Like nothing could bring you down.
And nothing could bring you down.
Down to my level, on the surface
Of this blue, blue, blue planet,
There was nothing to do here
But sing the blues
While you sing the good song.
Young lady of the moon,
You keep hanging there,
There’s nothing I can give you.
I can’t help it if I lust for you,
And your chalky white face.
Yeah, that round white face.
I’ve only got one simple request, Miss,
Just go black
And never come back.
I can’t bear it when you always return,
So next time you go, don’t come back.
Every time I see you,
I feel I can fly,
Like you fly, with the stars,
So far away, in the serene blackness
Of the void.
But it’s suicide
For me to fly
And one day I will fly
So high
And, like a shooting star,
Fall from the sky
And Die.
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I love the blues. So this sits good with me, but I think you need to incorporate a chorus into your song. Something that makes sense after all the stanzas. It will bring the whole thing together. Keep up the wonderful work.
P.S. I love your non-signature.
I love the blues. So this sits good with me, but I think you need to incorporate a chorus into your song. Something that makes sense after all the stanzas. It will bring the whole thing together.
P.S. I love your non-signature.